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November 14, 2010

To: Ms. Isabella Swan South East Accounting Inc. 3801 West Temple Avenue Trenton, New Jersey 41768

Dear Ms. Swan,

The personal appearance of the employees of our company is very important. The better the employees look, the better our company looks. Recently some of our employees have been showing up to work wearing unprofessional attire such as jeans, t-shirts, facial piercings, tattoos and tennis shoes. This attire does not reflect well on our company. This attire makes our company seem irresponsible, casual, and carefree. This makes customers doubt our organizations values and objectives. We want our customers to trust us, so I believe we need enforce a strict dress code that will help our employees look their best, which helps our company be the best. This dress code will enforce wearing professional clothing including the following: For men: - Business Suits with ties. - Collared shirts - Dress pants - Dress shoes - Clean cut hair - Clean cut facial hair - No visible tattoos or facial piercings

For women: - Business Pant or Skirt Suits - Collared shirts - Dress shoes - Clean cut hair styles - Natural looking make up - No visual tattoos or facial piercings

By enforcing this dress code our competitors and clients will take our company seriously. Our employees will get the respect they work hard for. Our company will be able to enjoy a more professional workplace. Can our company count on the enforcement of this dress code starting this next month? Call me at this number (456) 555-4532 and let me know your decision. If you decide to enforce this new dress code, I will begin to inform and enforce this new dress code. Thank you for your time. Sincerely,

Amanda Key

Honestly I did not like the topic you chose. You should have tried to persuade an idea that is more original. What you talked about was something that all companies usually require. But I read it any ways even though I felt it was not that interesting. I thought you wrote it very well and your style of writing is what would be appreciated by professionals reading. I was not captured by the beginning but i was still persuaded by the end of the letter. 17.

I feel that this letter was too direct. It had a much to serious tone that can make most readers stop mid letter. It is also to factual. A great persuasive letter must show facts, emotion and credibility. Instead this one shows purly fact which can be misinterpreted as superior attitude.
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For example instead of saying: "We want our customers to trust us, so I believe we need enforce a strict dress code that will help our employees look their best, which helps our company be the best," one could say: "It is very important the the crew looks their best, however to keep up the great atmosphere in the office perhaps a casual friday will balance out the problem."


 * 1) 18. I was persuaded by this letter. She made clear the pros that were in it for the company and employees if these changes where implimentsed. I also felt as though that there could of been some changes. She should proably not put down the company. She says; "This attire makes our company seem irresponsible, casual, and carefree." this could tun upper management to her idea and even make then angry. Although the problem I still believe it was a good letter.